The Bridge
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Looking for volunteer readers to read my 33 page short story, "The Bridge". Send me your email address, and I will send over a free manuscript. After reading please go on Amazon and leave a review. Thank you in advance.
The Bridge - Riya Jordan and her friends are excited about their trip to Brazil for a wildlife and forest organization before heading off to college. However, things take a turn for the worst when bodies are found mangled among their campgrounds by two predatorial stalkers. They are forced to run and find safety, but ends up helpless on a battered bridge.
While on this bridge, not only are they preyed upon by these beasts, but other deathly mishaps occurs
on... THE BRIDGE.
The Bridge - Riya Jordan and her friends are excited about their trip to Brazil for a wildlife and forest organization before heading off to college. However, things take a turn for the worst when bodies are found mangled among their campgrounds by two predatorial stalkers. They are forced to run and find safety, but ends up helpless on a battered bridge.
While on this bridge, not only are they preyed upon by these beasts, but other deathly mishaps occurs
on... THE BRIDGE.
You like the letter "s" too much.
"They are forced to run and find safety, but ends up helpless on a battered bridge. "
"End up" is correct.
"not only are they preyed upon by these beasts, but other deathly mishaps occurs"
"Mishaps occur" is correct.
Normally i'm not a grammar nazi but since you want to write i think its best to tell you such mistakes detract from the professionalism of your prose. It just doesnt look good.
You can send me a link by pm here or post a link for everyone, i wont give an email.
"They are forced to run and find safety, but ends up helpless on a battered bridge. "
"End up" is correct.
"not only are they preyed upon by these beasts, but other deathly mishaps occurs"
"Mishaps occur" is correct.
Normally i'm not a grammar nazi but since you want to write i think its best to tell you such mistakes detract from the professionalism of your prose. It just doesnt look good.
You can send me a link by pm here or post a link for everyone, i wont give an email.
Thank you. I believe my phone did that because it's correct in my folder. I copied and paste
Posted by Mr_Pinchy
You like the letter "s" too much.
"They are forced to run and find safety, but ends up helpless on a battered bridge. "
"End up" is correct.
"not only are they preyed upon by these beasts, but other deathly mishaps occurs"
"Mishaps occur" is correct.
Normally i'm not a grammar nazi but since you want to write i think its best to tell you such mistakes detract from the professionalism of your prose. It just doesnt look good.
You can send me a link by pm here or post a link for everyone, i wont give an email.
Thank you. I sent you an email
Posted by Supes
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Posted by Supes
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Email me Toletha.Dixon@gmail.com
Posted by theflyingarrow
I cant PM you 😢
Have you received enough volunteers?
I'm still interested in more reviews. Please email me at ilovetoread.tjd@gmail.com
Posted by MissLibra
Have you received enough volunteers?
Posted by MissLibra
Have you received enough volunteers?
I'll email you...
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